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Task 2
Please write your personal recount by your self

      1.    Choose one topic below! Write a Personal recount text individually based on the topic you have chosen.
a)         My Strange Experience
b)         My Mistake
     2.   Elaborate your Personal recount as good as possible in terms of organize into generic structure of text          (orientation, events and reorientation).

     *Deadline : September, On Saturday 6, 2014 (Midnight) please write your name and class 
        Note     :  use transition signal, example : then, after that, when and so on. In short,  your draft is coherence.
        
        Task 3.
        Please give your comment in your friends draft.  What do you think about the draft and pay attention to the verb. (Deadline : On September, 17, 2014)





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  1. My first experience at the time of the motor Up

    At that time I wanted to learn to bring the motor, I finally asked my friend to teach me to bring the motor. At the time of study brought me motorcycle looks very shaky and almost hit the fence it.

    It was my worst experience during the study carry the motor. I became very afraid again to learn to bring the motor. The next morning I became learned to bring a car, bring the car turns easier than bringing the motor. Eventually I became entrusted with the car, I became father to buy me a car Honda Jazz which I always take it to school 4 Kendari.

    Name: Hensrony Rompas
    Class: X IIS 1

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    1. I really like your thoughts, when you first bring a motorcycle. so am I with you, in the first time you bring a motorcycle. and you also have the experience to bring the car and the way you bring the car is very good. and very careful. thank you.

      Name : Andrian
      Class : X IIS 1

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    2. It sounds good Andrian. you have the same experience with Hensory. In short, you can express your idea to compare with. I like your voice. Good job :)

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  2. Holiday in Bandung City.
    Last holiday, I went to Bandung City with my father, my mother, and my brother. Bandung City for my family is favorite place for holiday. Apart from location for holiday, in Bandung City also famous for shopping and many place for a delicious culinary.
    My families holiday in Bandung City for three days. During our holiday in Bandung City, we stayed with my cousin, at the Ciumbuleuit street in Bandung City. They were very nice to my family. His name uncle Jajang, my uncle and her name aunt Evi, my aunt, also three children, Defani, Vidya, and Zalva.
    On the first day I and my family went to culinary tour at Dago street. There were a lot of culinary. Ranging from Sunda culinary up to Europe culinary. All culinary very delicious.
    On the second day, I and my family went for shopping. Bandung City famous for shopping places. One of the famous for shopping places for shopping. I and my family bought clothes. Such as shirts, pants, jackets, and some accessories.
    On the last day, I and my family went for a refreshing to Bandung zoo. At the Bandung zoo, there were many types of animals. From species of birds, including the Peacock can be seen at London zoo, other than that there were animals Bears, Dragons, Elephants, Tigers, Deer, Camels, Zebras, and Primates including Siamang.

    Nama: Muh Dirga Argaditya
    Class: X IIS 1

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    1. I am very surprised with your experience, bu teacher told us all to make the experience the worst or weirdest experience. But, you make the experience of the holiday to Bandung was very incoherent. I would remind you, before you do something about the origin of the first notice it. Thank you.

      Name : Hensrony Rompas
      Class : X IIS 1

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    2. Thank you so much Hensory about your critical comment. Perhaps, Muh. Dirga your experience is very interesting but you have to focus on the topic in draft II. Ok...! Enjoy with your writing....maybe, you can follow with another topic such as my strangre experience or my mistake,,,:)

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  3. I saw a very ugly demon

    that night I went home to rony, go do pr English Idioms, and we love working together, and rony make me coffee, then sya drink and I felt uncomfortable. and my parents leave home kepeda rony.

    when I walked I felt uncomfortable, it turns out there are following me from behind the devil, and I took the motor at full speed, and I look back it turns out he disappears me feeling very good. Eventually I safely home.

    name: andrian
    class: x iis 1

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  4. Name : Haslina Sarihu
    Class : XIIS 1

    once upon a time, I was told the same dost to make sweet tea for my father. show time is at 6:30 pm, I have prepared sweet tea on the table to be tasted by the father.
    then I was called the father "Sir, the tea is ready".
    "Yes, son," replied the father.

    after a few moments later her father shouted, "gee son, how it feels your tea, sweet tea or water is the sea".
    "Sorry sir, I do not purposely, I was afraid to rush late to school".

    I can not tell the difference between sugar and sweet garam.teh supposed, now transformed into a salty taste because of my lack of attention given to complete the work by dost. with this incident, I can only look down embarrassed because it can scolding from father, I can only apologize. "Sorry sir, once again I am sorry for my mistakes".

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  5. MY LATENESS GOES TO SCHOOL

    By Chindy Syahrier (XIIS.1)

    Last month, I woke up late bacause I watching movie until midnight and I had to go to school.

    When I wanted to take my motorcycle, in fact I couldn’t move it because there were some motorcycles that blocked up her motorcycle.

    I tried to move all of the motorcycles, so that my motorcycle could move from the garage. But I couldn’t do it.

    Then, I called Adel who had that motorcycle which blocked it up. After that, her friend who had that motorcycle helped me. Finally, I could move her motorcycle and rode it to go to school.

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    1. it was a good experience in your life that is less,, him that do not repeat the same thing for the second time. supposed to do when watching movies till late instead, use the time as best as possible so that tomorrow can get up early and go to school on time.

      Haslina Sarihu
      X IIS 1

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  6. My worst experience at the time of Playing Football

    At that time I aspired to be a football player who is very well known. Finally I decided to follow SSB (football schools). I also followed the practice of SSB in Kendari city pride Stadium is Stadium Lakidende, I am very happy to be part of the school.

    But at that time we were sparring exercises, I became believed to be the captain. By the time I bring the ball, I immediately tackling my opponent ohh no. I then exposed leg knee injury, I was hospitalized for a month. After that incident I never play football again. When I became an adult, I became a Member of the Police. It was my worst experience. ~ END ~

    Name: Andi corrected Aditya Putra
    Class: X-IIS 1

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    1. sorry bu I am wrong name, my name is Andi Reksy Aditya Putra, and I'm sorry mom because I was wearing a Google Account Hensrony Rompas. Thanks :)

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  7. one day, my friend and I drove my father's motorcycle at the time we went to a place not far from my house and when I got there sya saw some birds flying around, after 30 minutes we were there the end I went back to the house, but my friend took me to a place which is not too far approximately 3 km riding that place akhiranya we get out of it when I got there I saw more people bebapa sleeping under a tree, my gut feeling is no good, and one person got up when it was quiet atmosphere The last person to call us, it turns out we were in susruh buy cigarettes by the person buying cigarettes after I moved the pin back into place was to set the scene of cigarettes that I have purchased, when we go home I hit a car and I fell overturned on the asphalt, but when it I began to be afraid to ride motorcycles

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  8. one day, I went to a store that is not far from where I live to buy some school supplies, upon arrival there I saw some of the shop assistants and I entered the store weeks to buy some stuff and when I took one of the books I stepped on a banana skin up and dropped me right down to rest on a cupboard and the cupboard was falling and I was embarrassed and the cashier employee scolded me, and I have to tidy up the bookcase

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    1. a very embarrassing experience that once you do, you should be careful when walking. thankyou;)

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  9. Name : Muh. Rifqi Al-Ikhzan
    Class : X IIS 1

    My Strange Experience
    This story happened when i was a grade 1 junior high school, at a time when our school (classmates) intend to make observations on the outskirts of the forest that my friend proposed for the task given by the father of the ecosystem biology teacher living things. But presumably make observations, one of my friends who got lost in the woods. We decided to look for my friend. But we think we found it apparently was lost until the afternoon to see the direction of the sun in the direction toward our house, when we got home one of my friends who had lost their parents to notify turns out he's home first. It is one of the worst events for me and my friends.

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  10. WORST EXPERIENCE: FALLING FROM BIKE

    the story of the fasting month of last year, I tried to buy a new bike, bicycle plans that I had long been waiting for. for the first time I tried the bike, before I prepare a bicycle with front and rear lights.
    just 5km from home, suddenly was speeding motor-speeding hit me from behind, I was shocked and bouncing with the bike. I fell dragged up all the arms of my wound. I called out for help to the people who are around.
    Finally, people who are around to help me. The motorist feels guilty that he has done. Finally he took me to go home to treat my wounds.
    That was my worst experience that I could never forget. So much from me. Thank you.

    Name: Rusman Triadi
    Class: X.IIS.1

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  11. This story occurs when after school I intend visit to my grandmother's house which was not far from the location of the school cramps when walking.children who are walking,I tripped over a rock and make me my bloody feeling fall knee and hand mixed, pain and I was very embarrassed, many people are laughing at I stand and walk slowly while holding the embarrassment, how embarrassed I fell in front of his lot people.

    Andi sri rezky agasta sahril
    Class : XIIS1

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  12. strange events I've ever experienced that ...

    at that time I was taking a nap .. because I was so soundly asleep until before sunset and then I suddenly woke up and immediately panicked and almost cried because I thought that at that time I will be late to school .. finally I became quickly showered and ready for school with full uniform .. but suddenly I felt weird because my sister laughed at me finally I became realized that time was not the time to go to school but eventually I became the afternoon .. laughed to cover my shame ..

    Akilla Fadia Haya
    X IIS 1

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    1. your thoughts are very interesting to me, because when you wake up you immediately panic. you panic, because you do not realize that you were napping. preferably before you sleep, you have to pray that no confusion upon waking. : D thank you

      Rusman Triadi
      X IIS.1

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  13. #My Mistake

    At time of Junior High School, on thursday I went to school but I forgot to wear a tie, I am finally in a hurry to go take a bike and went straight home to take the tie.
    At the moment I fell deflection of the a bike due to many rocks. My feet hurt, fortunately there my friend to help me lift my bike.
    That's my fault, because I forgot to wear a tie eventually fell out of the a bike

    Name: NABILA SAFA SALZABILLAH
    Class: X IIS1

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  14. My Strange Experince


    One day, I went 04.00 morning prayers at the mosque Baitul Makmur. When on a trip, I saw a white shadow in front of me.
    Initially, I thought that it was just a man who was about to leave dawn prayers also, it was not. When I first saw it, I ignored it.
    But, when I saw it again, the shadow was gone. When I realized that it was not human, I immediately felt scared and was about to rush quickly to the mosque.



    Name : Marcha Reskiani M.
    Class : X IIS 1

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  15. NAME : ALMA ANUGRAH
    CLASS : X IIS 1

    One day, i went to a place along the way my father and my brother. This place a little away from my home. When I got there, I saw a lot of trees and there ia a dam turns the washing, My father told me to tore clothes and cars keys.I pocketed the key . The car suddenly it down car keys, and I do not guess after a few hours my dad to us to get dressed and go home at the top of the car. When my father scolded me and told to find the key the locks profit falls just below the car.

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    1. Your experience does look nice and good, but you do not have the theme of the experience. I as a reader and as a student of class X coolest in IIS 1 feel confused reading your thoughts, so before you consider making the experience first before sending it, so that any who read your thoughts is not confused anymore. Thank you;)

      Name : Andi Reksy Aditya Putra
      Class : X IIS 1

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  16. NAME : RINDINIA AFUARISTY A.
    CLASS : X IIS 1

    One day, I went to a place to buy a birthday present for my friend. I was riding a motorcycle that belonged to my mother's black colored. I finally moved from my home to the place. It was when I got there I saw a miraculous beautiful object to be made gift from my friend. When I started taking my suddenly suprised so I knocked over a bookcase to fall and I was told to her bu officers smoothed.

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  17. cation buguru accepted the above value, the message I smoga always successful, healthy wal afiat smoga we can meet again at another time, thank you for all the science that buguru gave to me and all my friends who are in the IIS-1 class teacher may bu not forgotten us and we will not forget at buguru


    poem for teacher:

    teacher mother .....
    sweet and beautiful memories with you
    stored always in my heart
    calm that made ​​me smile
    Your patience that makes me happy
    and
    Your upbringing that made ​​me win

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    1. Thank you so much izatul for your comment.....;)
      You are the best one.......Thank you about your coment

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  18. My comment to all my friends experience is very good and the good of the ways of writing, title, until the end of all his words were neat, but there ndak who had a good time because he's a beloved teacher who taught us to speak English

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    3. Name : Kharisma Pertiwi
      Class : X IIS 1

      My Mistake
      A day, I walked into a tourist attraction in Bandung with my big family, such as my father, my mother, my sister and I. We were enjoying the sights and have a look animal that was comforting visitors. At that time, my brother and I went to leave father and my mother who was cool to see the attraction of animal handler without knowing it, my sister and I had been separated from the range father and mother about two hours passed we continued around the park with my sister. I soon met my parents were again seated office information to wait me. My parents were very anxious and worried, and I promised not to repeat again.

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